Written by Jacob Ibrag
Yesterday I opened my eyes and
you seemed farther away. Our friends say
I shouldn’t worry, yet I feel the need to stay awake.
As world’s between us keep forming, I’m beginning to
realize my mistake. I manifested a universe where our
relationship used to be. Can hardly see your face as
the space between us continues to separate.
Danny Gluska – “Begin Again“
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Deeply Touched. Thank you for sharing ❤
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Thank you 🙂
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Wow,..I really enjoyed this. Great job! Many will be able to interpret and relate to the message also✨
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Thanks Lee 😀
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No problem ✨💖
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“I manifested a universe where our relationship used to be.” This poem hit home. Beautifully written as always Jake!
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Thank you very much 🙂
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Separation measured by faces…
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Reblogged this on crjen1958.
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I totally relate to it. I mean I’ve experienced this… Great that you shared your thoughts. Just loved it! ❤❤
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Thank you 😀
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This is amazingly awesome!!
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Thanks 😀
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This is beautiful
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Thanks Kristiana 🙂
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Beautifully written !!!!
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Beautifully written
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Thanks 🙂
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“Manifested a universe” that’s awesome
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Thanks Shane 🙂
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Really well written, you can just relate with the character throughout. Thanks for this.
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Thank you 😀
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Beautiful
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Thanks 🙂
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😊😊
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Sometimes I find a separation to be a liberation
that occurs out of my own hands – As if space
has done dropped the ax for me and all I have
is to go on breathing…
You’re writings always calm me
Thanks for sharing,
-IV
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I’m really happy you liked it, thank you 😀
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I’m just and OCD wreck looking to happen, forgive me, but it seems the shape of the piece should be pyramidal, as shape informs the action of the piece, right? …were it rounding down under, they’d be coming back together?
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No worries haha, the shape is purely aesthetic.
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…so there was no function for the form, ok.
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In most pieces, nope.
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….oh so there’s no function to the form, ok.
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I didn’t quite get this line- “As world’s between us keep forming”. World’s what forms between the two? or is it “As worlds between us keep forming”? I’m really sorry if this is a stupid question.
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Not at all a stupid question, it’s worlds forming between the two of them.
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Ah! Alright. Thanks a lot.
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Beautifully done
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Thanks Darie 🙂
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You are doing great work in poetry! Thank you for following A Total Solid Waste. I am enjoying your work as well.
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Thanks John 🙂
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