Written by Jacob Ibrag
I bleed will to eradicate
the walls you place before
and after me. It was never a
question of if I would march
through them, but when.
Stand beside the inevitable
or tremble beneath the
impeding juggernaut.
Photography by Alessio Albi
Eyes + Words 
I read this in reader, but came here to tell you how wonderful a piece this is. Thank you for creating it and sharing it with us.
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Thanks Kevin 🙂
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I find this beautiful but not poetic, merely breaking the lines won’t make a poem. I mean no offence but if you are better at prose writing, why try to write poetry?
This is not poetry. A beautiful paragraph? Yes. A wonderful write? Yes. Keep writing but it is my suggestion that you either learn some forms of poetry and practice them or just stick to what you are good at; prose writing.
Beautiful picture, by the way 🙂 Good luck 🙂
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Thanks for the suggestion, have a beautiful day 🙂
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And you too 🙂 Thanks for considering my suggestion 🙂
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Of course, thing is for me poetry is much more than rules, regulations and forms. No, it’s a means for expression. It allows me to dive a little deeper into myself and cut away from all the nonsense and truly stare into my soul. Truth be told, I don’t care if you call it prose or poetry. If my words have done anything for you, that is enough for me. Eyes + Words is about throwing away all of these rules and parameters and getting to the crux of humanity if that it is at all possible. I hope you can accept that. Welcome 🙂
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I would dislike to disagree with you considering the fact you read my poetry- thank you, man. Although this _is_ prose. Poetry has a certain form it must follow, otherwise it loses all meaning.
Following the belief that anything that expresses something is poetry means that any speech given is a poem. Or anything said- for that matter- is a poem.
You can not just break a story into pieces and call it poetry, because then poetry begins to lose all value.
But, what do I know. I am just a collection of black marks on a screen that you will quickly glance at.
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I totally value your collection of black marks on the screen haha. Thanks Vincent 🙂
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*bows* Thank you, man.
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You can’t simply make your own poetry. Poetry has some rules, you can’t break them all and simply call a prose a poem. If you want to express yourself, it can be done through prose which also has some rules.
I have heard this argument many times that poetry is much more than rules and forms but let me tell you, if you have not the courage to write poetry correctly, you should write prose which is free of all rules found in poetry.
There are no restrictions and you can use it to express yourself just as thoroughly as with poetry.
Ah! but if you publish it, your meaning will change if you make a prose, a poem. Poetry was the name of musicality and form, it has flow and meter and everything to make it musical. You can’t just say this is poetry when it is not.
Remember, you meaning will differ with the form of writing. If you want to touch the crux of humanity, you can do it through prose.
Your poem in prose (remind me if the meaning and feeling changes):
I bleed will to eradicate the walls you place before and after me. It was never a question of if I would march through them, but when. Stand beside the inevitable or tremble beneath the impeding juggernaut.
No offence intended 🙂 Just my point of view. 🙂
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None taken, call it whatever you like. Just hope you enjoyed the experience. 🙂
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I did, in the most wonderful of ways. I hope you will consider my suggestion 🙂 Thank you tolerating these rambling my mine 🙂
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I appreciate you so much, man.
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Thank you for your appreciation 🙂
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This is so poignant and eloquent… I really love the featured images you provide 🙂
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Thanks Sanghamitra 🙂
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“Poetry” is an immense word that qualifies many different things, from sunset to mountains to animals to photography to music to verse to prose. Of course, the lines are poetry. Contemporary poetry They are suggestive, employ an economy and compression of language, and a central image of the speaker inside the walls some other person has “placed before/ and after” him. HIs decision to break free from such constrains come in the last lines in the image of the “impending juggernaut,” which will tear the walls down.
So, in just three statements, the poet is able to tell a “little story,” suggest a complete and complex situation in which the speaker of the poem finds himself and, finally, indicate the speaker’s strong determination to end his imprisonment.
Good poem! A pleasure to read.
Jim Valero
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Thanks again Jim 🙂
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Oh, and by the way, contemporary, postmodern poetry, does not follow the “rules” of traditional poetry, but is free to do and experiment any which way it sees fit. As I suggested above, this poem does make use of poetic devices such as imagery, parallelism, logical development, compression of language, and so forth.
To pontificate that poets must “follow rules,” because poetry has “rules,” is an outdated, outmoded, archaic attitude that goes back to the 18th century, when the Neoclassicals insisted on such erroneous idea of poetry.
All this in good and constructive criticism! No offence intended to anyone.
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