Written by Jacob Ibrag
And as we go on pretending as if nothing had happened, the
noise between us stretches. More than a budding sound, it’s a dirty
stench and people are beginning to notice. I’m not saying the universe
revolves around us, but I think we broke it. It’s eighty three degrees in the
month of February and yet I feel utterly frozen. I guess you can blame global
warming and my body’s memory of the February temperature before this.
Please, just blink twice if you can hear what I’m thinking. I’ll break the
ice and part the river, to address the tension we’ve manifested.
‘I’m not saying the universe revolves around us, but I think we broke it.’ … brilliant line.
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Thanks 🙂
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Was just about to say the same ! Brilliant line 🙂 excellent poem
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Thank you 😀
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Excellent extended metaphor and aptly phrased
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Thanks Rob 😀
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(Clapping)!
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😀
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😉
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“Please just blink twice if you can hear what I’m thinking” amazing
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Thank you 😀
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I love this line too!!!
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Thanks Jennifer 🙂
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Beautiful, brilliant and feels like goodbye
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Thank you 🙂
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Amazing poetry Jacob.
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Thank you 😀
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Truly amazing. You are one of a kind 🙂 have a wonderful day
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Thank you very much 🙂
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Just curious, how do you get your posts to appear on just about every page of the reader? I have 8 reader pages saved and this post appears on every one.
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Hey Rob, I tinker with my posts.
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What the heck does that mean? I mean your post shows up under all of my categories alcoholism, poetry, love, sensuality, recovery, sobriety, relationships lol. Is is simply a matter of tags? Clue your pal in on this
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That’s really strange actually haha. It could be tags although I don’t think I’ve ever used tags such as alcoholism, sensuality, recovery or sobriety.
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Ok so is this top secret or will you help your ole pal Rob out?
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What I usually do is work on my pieces till I’m happy with them. Constantly editing and saving.
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Seems so simple doesn’t it?
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Sounds like the verge of breaking up, and, do you, really, break up, separate, or, do you stay together, because you think there’s still something that remained between the two of you…
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You got me my friend. In this frozen interphase, I feel imprisoned and immobile. The stench, the helplessness lost in between the expression forgotten as the time divides the tension that has made a breakthrough in our wall build by us to save us from the pain that it brings.
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I felt kind of connected with your poem foe the usage of the ‘as if,’ and ‘as’, which I also use a lot in my poems. Needless to say that that line was amazing, breaking the universe, deep. So, Keep up the great poetry work and the awesome posts, and once again, thank you for supporting my blog. Like, I really appreciate it.
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Thank you very much 😀
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No prob Bob. anytime.
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Hi, new follower here. I absolutely love this & ur blog!!! Can I reblog this by chance?
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Thank you and sure 😀
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