Written by Jacob Ibrag
You count down from ten while holding
onto your breath. Careful. Don’t make a sound, he
might hear you inhale. He holds you close, clenching his
fists. Four in the morning, you look towards the exit. Grab
his hand away from your heart and transplant it onto the bed.
This was all a mistake, a choice that you were never supposed
to make. He promised you the moon, the stars and everything
in between.You waited half of your life, force feeding on
his dreams. And somewhere down the lie, something
in you awoke. It was an image of his hand covering
your mouth as you tried to scream no.
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very creepy, but well written. If it’s only an image, RUN.
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Thank you, this wasn’t based on anything in my own life. I think it’s my way of trying to process abusive relationships that we’re exposed to via media.
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Wow! This elicits fear on a primal level. Well written, and interesting commentary.
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Aw… it’s very heart wrenching
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Ahhhh! This is potent!
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wow that last line scared me
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Gave me chills when I wrote it as well.
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Haha, I bet! Still can’t get over it.
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This-was-amazingggg…
Nice one !
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Thanks Sanya ๐
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This is a nightmare come to life. It is so raw, real, and necessary to be heard
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This has very powerful imagery. A great read. ๐
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This can easily be interpreted into a very common scenario but it’s that one word that tends to give new meaning to it. Brilliantly penned, Jacob; well thought out and played.
~Devlin
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Thanks Devlin ๐
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A chill-inducing and powerful piece; I love coming across poems like this. Very well done ๐
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This stops you in your tracks. Well done!
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Thank you very much ๐
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My goodness. Creepy and scary.
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and, with that realization, hopefully, the narrator will finally, make her getaway from this guy who doesn’t really love her, but is controlling her instead…
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Very powerful! You tapped into the dark side of this type of abuse. I pray that our words would move people to realize this is a real epidemic, not a hollywood movie. The fear is real, as is the threat.
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Very well written and portrayed
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Amazing !!! really really amazing write !!!
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Hi Eyes + Words Powerful! Thank you for liking my poem “The Ships!” Peace and Best Wishes. The Foureyed Poet.
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Very profound.
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My pleasure, so in love with your work. โบ
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