Story Seeds


Written by Jacob Ibrag

‘I’ve tended to this establishment for over fifteen years of

my life. If you asked me what the secret to having a business was,

I’d always say that routine and stability were it. They come hand in

hand, something you have to work towards. Once you get it, you have

to hold onto it with every fiber of your being because there will be those

that’ll want to threaten it and take it away. Now I’m going to ask you one

more time little girl, who are you and why are you here?’ The owner stood

behind the bar with his arms crossed for fifty seconds before she took out a

cigarette and placed it between her lips. Out of pure reflex, he reached into

his right hand pocket only to realize that his camouflage lighter was missing.

Refocusing his attention towards her, he found his lighter in her right hand

and a colt 45 pointed towards his temple gripped in her left. Lighting her

cigarette, she tossed his prized possession onto the bar and said, ‘I am the

reincarnation of the soul you took that from. I was your beginning

fifteen years ago and at this very moment,’ softly pulling

the trigger she continued, ‘I am your end.’

Photographer Unknown

70 comments on “Secret

  1. Sweet revange…nicely narrated.

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  2. More please. *In an Oliver Twist voice*

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  3. Longest poem so far. And amazing!!!! The end is perfect!! Love this!

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  4. Wow fabulous

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  6. Brilliant I love this… ice cold revenge with a cigarette.

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  7. alittlebitnaughty


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  8. Outstanding piece of written mastery,

    dear sir!


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  9. The end was like a movie scene in front of me,got so into it that I actually used a different,more appropriate tone while reading her lines!! Loved it Jacob!

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  10. Love it, good composition

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  11. Kaushik Prasad

    Beautifully penned.☺

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  12. wanderingmignonne

    this is enchanting

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  13. Oh beautiful! It felt so Fight Club like, when he reached for the lighter but didn’t find it. Like when Norton finds the gun in his hand in the end!

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  14. Fallen Saint

    Wow, intense! -Fallen

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  15. I forgot the words when seeing the scene, what is proof that the words are just perfect.

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  16. middleofnowhereweb

    Splendid! ^_^ πŸ˜€
    Great writing style, and I also love this whole set-up— the image, and the designation: ‘story seeds’.

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  17. Encounter on Water Street

    By: William C. Burns, Jr.

    It was late summer, a time of colossal thunderstorms and splendid burgundy crimson sunsets. The twilight lingered as the night was taking it’s own sweet time in coming. There was no air conditioning and the over head Casablanca fans did little to take the edge off of the sweltering summer humidity that wafted through the open windows of the little coffee shop/bar. Still it was home to me.
    She came through the garden gate that opens onto Water street. I saw her through the window, her red/blonde hair brushed by the evening breeze. I recognized her. Sylvia. I wanted to throw back my chair and rush out the door, but I couldn’t. Lightning does that to me.
    There was a tall man in what appeared to be a very expensive suit, holding a newspaper leaning against the ante of the door, waiting for some one. Please God let it not be for her. Then it occurred to me. I could not let her see me like this. The years haven’t been kind to me. I stepped out of sight into the convenient shadows.
    She pushed through the crotchety old door and looked around the shop clearly not finding the someone she sought. I wondered how she had found this place, but then her instincts had always been good.
    She fidgeted by the cash register while the young man, Jeremy, performed the stainless-steel ritual of preparing her coffee. The small stack of turquoise colored chap books caught her attention.
    “Oh, who’s this?”
    “Some local poet, we’ve sold a few of his chap books. Actually I’ve talked with him and he writes kinda neat stuff. You want a copy?”
    “OK, yes, thank you.”
    I gave him a sign and he nodded. Bright kid really.
    “How much do I owe you?” she asked.
    “No charge on that mam, courtesy of the house.” He made it look like we gave books away all the time. Nice tip tonight.
    “Never heard . . .”
    “Standing orders, first one’s free. Now don’t forget your book.” And then he made himself scarce, very bright kid.
    She sighed and looked once again around the shop. She moved to my favorite table by the window where you can see the college library. My dead heart found new ways to break. “I’m going to sit here and read this.” She noticed her hand shaking as she opened of the cover.
    The title of the book is Reflections. I know because I wrote it, wrote it for her. I didn’t know it at the time but I have been writing for her ever since the day . . . Enough of that.
    I watched her eyes as closely as I could, eyes the color of poetry. She read each line like she was walking through a park or a graveyard, reading the monuments. About halfway through the fourth poem a spasm of realization made her jump. She knocked her cup to the floor. Jeremy materialized as if by magic and helped clean up the mess. She fought to regain her composure while he went for another cup.
    “Jeremy, you said that you have met the man who wrote this?”
    “Yeah, his name is Largo, he’s here all the time. A bit eccentric really, but not in any negative way.”
    “Did he ever mention who he wrote this . . . for?”
    He looked straight at me. “I’m not really at liberty to say,” at this point his voice raised ever so slightly and I knew he was challenging me. “Maybe you can ask him yourself, if he shows up.” Then he walked away.
    I couldn’t stay in the shadows any longer. She was reading as I came close. She looked up with a start. For just a moment I wondered if she recognized or feared me.
    “Please, please, I didn’t mean to startle you miss.” She didn’t answer. “The book of poetry? That’s my work, I wrote that. Jeremy will tell you I’m harmless.” Still nothing. I couldn’t tell if she was angry or afraid. “I’m so sorry, please . . . I’ll go now.”
    “You wrote this?”
    “When?” Ouch.
    “Well . . . May I sit with you?”
    “I have no idea who you are.”
    “Do you like the poetry?”
    “Well, yes. I love the poetry.”
    “Love the poetry, love the man. I mean you no harm.”
    “I’m sorry. I’m not usually so harsh, but you’ve written some things in here,” she held up the chap book, “that have hit me . . personally. I feel a little vulnerable. I sometimes get a little aggressive under such circumstances.” Classic, exactly the way I remember her. “Please mister Largo, sit down.”
    Jeremy brings me the usual and a smile. He knows.
    “About this poem right here. . . Alien Playground, I would swear I’ve been there. And this one, Drowsy Repose what were you thinking when. . .” And it went on like that all night. We could always talk like that. No effort really just a river of conversation that never went dry. Jeremy left around midnight but that was no problem and I promised to keep an eye on things. He locked the door on his way out.
    I don’t know exactly when she realized that we had been lovers long ago only blocks from this very spot, but she did. She placed her hand on mine and it was just so natural for it to be there. The night passed in a moment.
    I noticed the sun peeking through the eastern window and cursed. “That wasn’t very gentlemanly.”
    “I not certain gentlemanly is a word.”
    “When did you change your name to Largo?”
    “It’s my middle name, I just started going by it after the accident. The sun is coming.”
    “I know, we only have a few moments left.”
    “I wish . . ”
    “Wish what?”
    “I wish you didn’t have to go.” She smiled, kissed me, called me by my real name and every so gently dissolved in the grainy light of morning. She might have been saying that she loved me.
    I stared down at the table, drawing circles with the water from my tears. Jeremy would say that the problem with demons and angels is that all their thoughts are one thought. Same goes for ghosts I guess, we just can’t seem to let go.
    I dissolved as the day shift guy pushed through the crotchety old door. He had never seen me and I was really in no condition for making new acquaintances.

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  18. artemisdelmar

    This is great!

    I have this image of this woman also with a post I never published. I think you just made me want to revisit the post and work on it again.

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  19. Thank you for sharing. Your words rise from the page to create three dimensional images, vivid provocative.

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  20. Gripping ☺

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  21. fantastic! πŸ™‚

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  24. samberryblend

    Wow, that was intense. I want more! Great piece.

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  25. πŸ‘… Brilliant beyond measure.. πŸ‘

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  26. I was captured from the very beginning. I am so in awe of you and your writing. If only I could be 1/1,000,000 of the talent you are.

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